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 |  | The Stuff Screams Are Made Of  [18+] Scream and scream again  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: The first paragraph gave the readers a great sense for foreboding, and even before you mentioned where and when this took place, the readers got a feeling of dread simply from the mention of the horrible secret. A secret that seemed to be intelligent because it wanted something – it needed the girl to perform some sort of task. It was the language you used that added to the readers discomfort, and I could imagine this being narrated by someone like Christopher Lee. You then set the story in a graveyard at Halloween, which made it worse, and the descriptions of the scene – first the brother following his sister into the bowels of an ancient crypt and then the creation of the creature – were almost too good because I could imagine it all too well. You can probably tell that I’m not a frequent reader of horror stories, and yours is one of the reasons why. If done well (as yours was) I find them very scary  The relationship between the siblings came across very well in this tale. The older brother clearly loved her and followed her to keep her safe, and when he was in danger, his sister tried to help him. It was nicely done, despite the outcome where neither was able to save the other.  Suggestions: The story was well written and I didn’t notice any errors. I do have one question though, regarding this line: I remember the first time I followed my little sister up into the graveyard. To me, that sounds like this happened more than one, this being the first time and then it occurred at least once more. But considering the ending, this was the only time he followed her, and, again judging by the ending, he wouldn’t have been able to remember the event at a later point. I might be missing something or misreading that line.  Final Thoughts: The title was very well chosen, and the parts where the narrator screamed were the most scary, especially the first time when the reader wasn’t sure if he would succumb to his fear or stand up to the demon. This was a good story, but I’m glad I read it during the day and not at bedtime because I’m sure it would have given me nightmares!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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