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 A Melody of a song Open in new Window. [E]
this tells how you can put a music beat together and make it into good music
by Mary Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Mary,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about taking a melody and integrating it into a song of your own. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)The piece needs to be broken up into individual sentences.

You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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