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 | A Random Act of Kindness  [13+] How a random act of kindness creates an interesting chain of events  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: I felt a little guilty when I chuckled at this story, considering that the circumstances were quite tragic. But the way you told the story was very funny and I couldn’t help smiling as the event unfolded. At the same time, I felt myself getting quite angry at the whole situation (the consulting room on the eighth floor, the unsympathetic doctor and the ridiculous rules about the number of legs a person is allowed to have) so the humorous asides worked well for me to lighten the mood. I don’t think I was meant to be quite so emotionally involved  The descriptions were excellent, and the way you described what had happened to the main character with a measure of humour worked very well to give the readers an idea of his personality. Even when the doctor was being unkind, he took it all in his stride. It said a lot about him, but I got the feeling that all the veterans there acted the same way, and their lack of emotion came from a place of resignation as the system wasn’t equipped to deal with the demand. This made the ending all the more satisfying, and in my head I was cheering for him and the first bit of good luck he had experienced in a while.  Suggestions: The story was very well written and I didn’t notice any errors so I’m going to use this section to quote a sentence that made me laugh out loud: “Bugger. Still, I suppose I could ride the handrail down,” the doctor mused. I almost started to warm to the doctor at that line because the way he didn’t give two hoots about his patient and just cared about his own convenience was so over the top that he surely couldn’t be serious and just said it for comical effect. He lost me again straight after but that one line was so perfect that I had to applaud his comedic genius.  Final Thoughts: It’s not going to come as a surprise to you when I say that I loved this story. I’m not sure if I’ve ever seen Sci-fi, War and Comedy together in a story, but you made it work, and I enjoyed the read!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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