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| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: It’s always difficult for readers to find their way around a world the writer has created when they first start reading. Everything is unfamiliar, from the setting to the language and the kind of characters that are in the story. I read the first item you posted in this novel, which explained a little about all of those, so I was prepared, but what really helped was the way you described everything. I liked how you did that - for example, you didn’t say Skrie was short, you showed her sitting on a chair barely being able to look over the table. It works to give the readers a lot of information at once without boring them with lists of attributes each character has. It felt like not much was happening in this chapter, but as an introduction, it was nicely done. I felt like I learned quite a lot about this world by the end.  Suggestions: I didn’t notice any errors and I don’t have any suggestions, so I’m going to point out a section that I particularly liked. The part when they first walk around and hear all the grumbles from others about all those things that aren’t working well or need improvement - I thought that was excellent because it told the readers the general mood in that place at the time, with many being unhappy but feeling unable to do anything about it, other than grumble about it.  Final Thoughts: I was looking at your portfolio to find something to review for your anniversary, and I saw two beautiful paintings you had used as thumbnails for your Everine stories. As my eyes were immediately drawn to them, I picked one of those stories. Are the paintings yours? (And if they are, you could mention this in the folder description, as well as how they relate to the story, if they depict a particular place.) You have clearly given this story a lot of thought, and the folder is well organised in reading order and with subfolders for additional information. The story was well written (I struggled a little with the language at first but I imagine that if I read on, I would soon get used to it). A good read!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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