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 | The Haunted Hotel  [13+] Is Sarah's holiday about to be ruined by a ghostly encounter?  |
| (4.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: As I was reading, I wondered what made me click on this story. I’m going on holiday next week and the last story I should have chosen was one about a haunted hotel!  Fortunately, it all turned out okay, and if I run into these kinds of ghosts, I’m going to be quite happy. This was a nice story with a bit of suspense and mystery, and for a while, I wasn’t sure if there really was something untoward going on. Like the main character, my imagination was working overtime when she heard the noises. It goes to show that if someone puts a silly idea like this into your head, you’re more likely to believe in a strange explanation that wouldn’t ordinarily have crossed your mind at all. Sarah was a likeable character. She was looking forward to a few days of relaxation, she was happy with the accommodation and liked the ocean and the pool, and she was friendly even when things seemed a little strange. The ending was nice, when she promised to keep the secret because, well, who wouldn’t, in that situation?  Suggestions: “Into” or “in to”. I have to admit I confused myself when I suddenly wasn’t sure about the rules and googled them. She thought about changing in to a bikini and diving in to the clear, cool ocean. I think these need to be one word, “into” because something goes inside something else. But Google also gave an example about “logging in to your computer”, which apparently is the correct way, so later on when she watched Ersin tap details in to his computer, this is correct. I think? Sorry, that wasn’t very helpful But there were quite a few instances of ‘in to’ you might want to take a look at to be sure. “I am sorry Sir, Madam,” The receptionist was saying, “But these rooms are non-refundable. This error popped up a few times. This is one sentence with the speech being interrupted by the dialogue tag, so it should continue with lower case letters after the comma. “I am sorry Sir, Madam,” the receptionist was saying, “but these rooms are non-refundable. a little more battered looking that the others Just a typo, “than the others”.  Final Thoughts: After you revealed what the ghosts actually were, I had to laugh at the other guests for being so scared of them. Their imagination had run away with them and they had turned the strange sounds into something frightening. Since Sarah had promised not to tell and the receptionist wasn’t going to explain either, I suppose they had to spend the rest of their holiday afraid of the ghosts A good story, I liked it!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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