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 Flight Q 986 Open in new Window. [13+]
A young woman finds herself out of her depth
by Sumojo Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hi Sue,


This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of confusion and anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if anyone will find Skyla. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who is the sole survivor of a plane crash and must survive while waiting for help to arrive. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Skyla, and she comes across as a real person. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that needs your attention:

1)The thought she may be the only survivor horrified her but there were no sounds or signs from any other passenger.-There should be a comma after "her".

2)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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