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 Chicken riding a dog Open in new Window. [E]
Poem based on true event that happened a while ago.
by Joseph Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Joseph!

Such a heartwarming story we have here in your poem, of animals working together to help each other. I’ve heard of and seen such things on social media, and it’s always so touching to see how well the different animal species get along.

Your rhymes are present but not overwhelming, as we see them give way a couple times to the natural flow of words. This gives the poem a home-y and conversational tone as we see the chicken and the dog in their loving farm environment, and avoids being too trite or stiff or predictable. The verses are well balanced and easy to read. Formatting is excellent, with a large clear font and three genres chosen.

Possible typos include:
* In lines 4 and 15 you have used the wrong form of the word “there.”
* perhaps the “dialogue” between the dog and chicken should be set in quotes or italics.
* In line 13 the semicolon is awkward and could perhaps be replaced with a comma
* In line 14 the word “tourist” should be plural
* and in the final line, perhaps again the dialogue should be set in quotes.

Aside from these minor details, I see nothing here to modify.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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