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Miss Froggy Open in new Window. [E]
The life of a lady frog...
by Amethyst Angel 🍁🙏 Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Amethyst Angel 🍁🙏, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest Open in new Window.. And you are one of five entries!


*Pencil* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Boxcheckb* Followed the prompt & rules

*Crayons4* First Impression:
This is a nice little piece that begins with Miss Froggy sitting on a lily pad, eating flies. You take us through the seasons with Miss Froggy, describing what she does in each one. When spring arrives, she becomes a mom to tadpoles. In the end, the seasons have come full circle and Miss Froggy is back to sitting on the lily pad, eating flies. *Frog*

*Crayons2* Favorites:

In autumn when leaves turn golden and brown
Miss Froggy eats extra and then hunkers down;


*Crayons8* Final thoughts:
Great sequencing through a year with a frog! Just a few suggestions...You left out punctuation in a few places, which in children's poetry, is important so they know where to pause, and where a sentence ends. Also, your meter began perfectly, but then you gained a syllable or so, especially toward the end. It's an easy fix, of course. *Wink* I liked how you included a link for more information on the life cycle of a frog.

Nice entry! Best of luck in the contest. And be sure not to make any changes till after the winners are announced.

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