Hi Purple Princess,


This is a fantastic story. The tone is intense and full of love and tension. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Adam will get the chance to tell Chelsea he loves her. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a young couple who get caught during a romantic interlude and try to find more time together. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.