Talking Turkey [E] For the Dialogue 500 contest -- prompt "Talking Turkey." |
HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" Greetings, Ruth Draves! I am reviewing this because I am part of the Anniversary Reviews Team, and today is your 11th Writing.com Anniversary! First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked This had me laughing from the very beginning. You never mentioned if you placed in this contest, but I wouldn't be surprised if you had. I have to admit, my favorites were: “Thank you for calling the Butterball Thanksgiving Hotline. This call may be monitored for quality assurance. My name is Betty. May I have your name and a phone number to reach you in case we become disconnected?” “Gobble.” “I’m sorry, we seem to have a bad connection. Can you please repeat that?” “I said, ‘Gobble.’” I was seriously laughing when I read this. And also, the following: “”Cause I’m only going to say it once.” “I promise you I’m listening.” “Give this message to your boss: Get us off the table or the Doughboy gets it.” “I’m sorry, could you repeat that?” “Jeez, really?” I love your sense of humor! You've managed to create an entire piece in all dialogue, and under 500 words. It was not only comical, but well-done! Excellent. I had no trouble figuring out who was talking, without dialogue tags. Suggestions/Comments to Consider Not hardly worth mentioning, but some of the line spacing was off. Final Thoughts I thoroughly enjoyed this. It was the first item in your portfolio that I opened, and I wasn't disappointed at all! Again, Happy 11th WdC Account Anniversary! I hope you have many more! A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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