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Review #4774895
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 Talking Turkey Open in new Window. [E]
For the Dialogue 500 contest -- prompt "Talking Turkey."
by Ruth Draves Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary ReviewsOpen in new Window.*CakeP*


*Tulipp* Greetings, Ruth Draves! I am reviewing this because I am part of the Anniversary Reviews Team, and today is your 11th Writing.com Anniversary! *Smile*

*Quill* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Tulipo* The Positives/What I Liked

         *Bulletv* This had me laughing from the very beginning. *Laugh* You never mentioned if you placed in this contest, but I wouldn't be surprised if you had.
         *Bulletg* I have to admit, my favorites were:

“Thank you for calling the Butterball Thanksgiving Hotline. This call may be monitored for quality assurance. My name is Betty. May I have your name and a phone number to reach you in case we become disconnected?”

“Gobble.”

“I’m sorry, we seem to have a bad connection. Can you please repeat that?”

“I said, ‘Gobble.’”


I was seriously laughing when I read this. *Rolling* And also, the following:

“”Cause I’m only going to say it once.”

“I promise you I’m listening.”

“Give this message to your boss: Get us off the table or the Doughboy gets it.”

“I’m sorry, could you repeat that?”

“Jeez, really?”


I love your sense of humor!

         *Bulletp* You've managed to create an entire piece in all dialogue, and under 500 words. It was not only comical, but well-done! Excellent.
         *Bulletb* I had no trouble figuring out who was talking, without dialogue tags.


*Tulipo* Suggestions/Comments to Consider

         Not hardly worth mentioning, but some of the line spacing was off.


*Tulipo* Final Thoughts

         I thoroughly enjoyed this. It was the first item in your portfolio that I opened, and I wasn't disappointed at all! Again, Happy 11th WdC Account Anniversary! I hope you have many more!

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Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
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