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 | The Adonis  [13+] Dive into the all-inclusive resort.  |
| (4.5)  Hi, Purple! What a cute story! As a woman sits by the pool on vacation, she writes about an alluring guest at the hotel she's had eyes on. I enjoyed the ending where we are informed she is writing about her own husband! ~~~ I'm not sure this story had any kind of conflict, but perhaps I'm wrong. I'm still relearning a lot of the different kinds of conflicts and resolutions in stories... Regardless, I think the story flowed well and it was humorous. I wouldn't have guessed that were to be the way it ended and I still really enjoyed the story. ~~~ I have no suggestions as far as grammar.  My favorite!  ~~~ Overall, I thought this was a really fun piece about a couple on vacation. While the wife fantasizes about hooking up with this gorgeous man at the hotel's pool, we come to find out she's fantasizing about her own partner. It was sweet in that way, and worked extremely well as a romance flash fiction. Great job! Thanks for sharing!  A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group"   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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