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 Shadow and Stone Open in new Window. [13+]
A village witch must find the source of a child's nightmares.
by Jessie Toft Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Wow, fantastic work here! I was at the edge of my seat as Atropa dealt with the shadow trying to take away Edgar’s life. The battle was thrilling, and your myriad of rich details encompassed me like the witch’s spells. You pushed your character to her limit, and that’s the best way to make us root for her. I’ve read fantasies where the witch has it “too easy;” even the nemesis seemed wimpy. This was definitely not the case here. You included lots of sensory details and kept us firmly within Atropa’s head the whole time, using all the recommended techniques of good story writing. With a few words, you’ve painted the minor and supporting characters well, with an affection for nature evident. This was an enjoyable read.

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