Hi rainyplot336,

This is a wonderful piece. The tone is formal. It suits the piece and plot very well. The reader is wondering if anything will disturb the peace that exists in this city. They will read to the last word to find out. The piece is about a peaceful day in a city. The piece is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The piece concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)The air holds a crispness that invigorates the senses and the world seems to slow.-There should be a comma after "senses".

The piece is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.