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 To think or to not Open in new Window. [E]
A little something about thinking to think or thinking to not think about thinking.
by Marie Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dear Marie Author Icon,

Sounds like fun word play with the repetition of think, because this short poem aptly expresses the poem topic: overthinking. I envy that you likely had fun with an epiphany to put this together.

I think the Hamlet inspired title could be a good fit. Many a parody of that play with his monologues, contemplation, speaking to his dead court jester’s rot skull, contemplating an existential life (a subject that could go on forever…it seems). Even good use of the description line that’s less a tease of the poem but a recap, that should give a reader an extra chuckle.

When I write something similar to this, I don’t stop. It begins free association. There’s lots of directions to take this further. You could interview you on the subject…Today: Does Marie think too much? Let’s ask Maria. Maria, you claim to overthink. Why is this?” “Well, it all started when I was a child and couldn’t decide on a flavor of ice cream and was holding up the line.”

It would be fun to make a listing poem, either about choices and why you’re on the fence (make it visual, too), places you think, the longest you’ve went without a thought…okay, I’m out of ideas. You get the gist.

Don’t settle on this. That’s the joy of word play, imagination, using poetry devices and structures to really flesh out what I think is a pretty neat start. You could also introduce long pauses with periods, dashes, long line breaks to show thinking in whatyou have offered here. I found it amusing and you should do more like this. If it gives you joy. If you’ve seen my blog, you’d know. I finish a poem, comment on the poem, add a coda, add a response poem, even make a math poem.

Well, that’s enough of me. It was cool I found this on the read and review page and prompted to respond. Hope to see you around again.

Brian
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