Hi Prosperous Snow,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anxiety and doubt. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about Adam and Eve's thoughts and feelings after the Fall. I love the Creation Story and have often thought of what Adam and Eve were feeling after they were expelled from Paradise. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.