Hi Angel,

This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the future you dream of having with the man you love. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)In a few places you have put one part of a sentence on one line and continued it in the next pattern. You should keep your sentences together to keep your writing clear for your reader.

2)In a few places you have neglected to begin proper names with a capital letter. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use an emotional style that is very appealing to
the reader. Great job.