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Stick  [E]
Enough 'Stick' poems, I'll have a forest!
by Fyn
Review of Stick  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings,

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge *Smile*

I love how you've managed to work with the guidelines of this poem and create something with lasting meaning and significance. It feels solemn like a wedding vow. I struggled with trying to fit mine together while giving it some intelligent meaning and theme while keeping within the syllable counts... In fact I'm pretty sure I didn't do it correctly *Laugh*

As one who has yet to master the poetic style in question, then, I won't bother pointing out where I think you might have over-counted your syllables in the second line... Oh wait, the words that end in "ed" are one syllable *Facepalm* That's why the poets of yore would add an accent over the é, to create an extra syllable. See? That's why I avoid form poetry at all costs *Rolling*

The theme of fidelity and strength under the trials of life is expressed well here. I think this would look nice written out in script on fancy paper as a gift to a loved one. I enjoyed reading it.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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