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First Impression

Wow. I would totally be interested in reading this book, after reading your first chapter. I have so many questions I long to find the answers to. Who is Carly? How did she end up her situation? How did the kidnappers end up with the wrong girl, if in fact, she really is the wrong girl? These are all cliff hangers that will be answered as more chapters unfold. Good job! And for such a short chapter, I must say...you've managed to pack a lot in. I prefer short chapters, personally, as long as they are not uneventful. This definitely was not uneventful and my brain is whirling with intrigue.

Thoughts/Suggestions

I did not notice any typos or concerns. The font was a bit small for me, but I enlarged my screen a little and that helped a lot.

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it brought the reality that they had the wrong girl.
(Great cliffhanger!)

Thank you for entering the July contest round. Unfortunately, there is no one to compete with, so I can't say "Best of luck in the contest!" *Smile* I will, however, be sending you something for your well-written entry. Let me know if you continue with this story.

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