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 the rhythm of writing Open in new Window. [E]
a glimpse into the process
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Hello Rhyssa,

Your poem "the rhythm of writing" came up under Read & Review at random. I am happy it did because I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Often, it is difficult to get a nice flow in free verse and you did so very well. It was perfect to read it out loud to get the full enjoyment. I related to shutting down my laptop when words refuse to make themselves known. Having the words run through your mind later, demanding to jump out on your screen, happens to me often.

There were some "stutters" while reading when I came upon a comma at the end of the second stanza. I would change that to a period. The first sentence in the next stanza refers back to that last sentence but can stand by itself. That line, "which reminds of a story I saw on the net," feels like the word me should be in there so it "reminds me." I say that because your other sentences are complete with pronouns.

A terrific read for me this evening. Thank you for writing what I think many writers can definitely relate to.

Write on!
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