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 A Stone in my Pocket  [E]
From my book "Chocolate and Stitches" available on Amazon
by William MacPoetry
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

Great to see you have a published book. This is a fantastic poem, full of metaphor which hits home with a certain plucky, painful humor. An inspector goes deep within to check up on a badly damaged heart and comes back with a report - how creative!

The metaphor is somewhat mixed, as we see "a heart with no eyes" (hearts don't usually have eyes) and then see a handwritten sign pinned to the "bark..." But overall it makes perfect sense and paints a vivid and visceral picture of heartbreak in a brief and refreshing way.

Your free verse is easy to read and thoughtfully arranged. Possibly the only suggestion I have for improvement is to correct "it's" to "its."

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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