Hi Chico,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is tinged with unease. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if there is something wrong with the speaker. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who has a general feeling that something is wrong and goes to a psychiatrist and his family doctor about it. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to begin sentences with a capital letter You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.