Hi Josh,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with disbelief. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what the man with the crowbar intends to do with it. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who encounters a thief and reflects on his circumstances. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The speaker speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.