Hi JACE,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a dark day which turns bright very rapidly. This happens where I live a lot. The weather here is very unpredictable. I loved this poem and read to the last word. You have used thirteen words instead of fourteen like you form asks for. You did concentrate on one thought all through. The reader is able to imagine the day being dark and then lightening up as it goes on. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.