Hi RJFuller,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if these women will do something about their dissatisfaction with the award distribution. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about three women who are discussing people of color who have received awards. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and believable. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:


1)"Oh, Casine, you have a lovely home from what I saw outside and now I see in here,"-There should be a comma after "outside".

2)"Der old Sabela-"Der" should be "Dear".

3)In a few places you have neglected to begin sentences with capital letters. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.