Hi Annaliese,

This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with excitement as preparations are being made to go out. The reader is wondering what the evening will turn out like and will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. The reader is completely pulled into the excitement of clubbing. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)I almost cry-Should read "I almost cried"

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.