Hi Serenity,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of awe and confusion. The reader is wondering if there is anything else is going on in the lab, other than genetic engineering. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a man finds a shocking secret when he tours a scientific lab. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.