Hi Korosu,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is tinged with impatience. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Hester will take the unusual doe or find another one. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who is hired to hunt for a noble woman. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)“Hey now, that’s not way to respond to me is it?”-"not" should be "no".

2)You have neglected to put commas before coordinating conjunctions. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.