Hi Chico,

This is a fantastic piece. The tone is full of confusion and self-doubt. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will kill themselves and, if so, how they plan to do it. They will read to the last word to find out. The piece is about someone who is contemplating their life and all the things which led to the place they are in now. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The person from the speaker's past speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.