Hi Korosu,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of confusion and frenzied. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone suffering from a mental illness and, probably, having a breakdown. I am hoping that the speaker has someone they can call on to help them. I read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have used it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.