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 | Colorful Love Life  [13+] This details my experience fighting for the love of my life despite family racism.  |
| (4.5)   Welcome to our fabulous community. I am honored to be asked to review your chapter book. Our focus is to read and review each other’s work. I have read “Colorful Love Life” and have some thoughts to share. These are only my opinions. I hope they will resonate with you. First impression: I look at the title, rating, genre, and description first. One of my favorite types of writing is autobiographical work. We learn much about people, can relate to experiences, and enjoy an uplifting, inspirational, or life lesson true story. Content: Your story is constructed in a manner that from the strong hook about discussing things you mostly don’t want to talk about I was all in. The first paragraph told me what you would discuss and why it was important for me to read on. I liked the way, after the introductory paragraph, your story was written chronologically. Throughout, I learned much needed information about your parents and their parenting style. There are stereotypes in all ethnicities. I am not sure all are aware of the others. One of the important ways to get exposure to your work is by the genres you choose. I suggest you remove “other” because regular readers can access genres they enjoy reading through our search function. I can almost guarantee not many check that category. You also want to choose all three genres available to you. This is most assuredly “inspirational.” There are a lot of choices. As time goes on, you will be accustomed to them and see what genres are noted in the pieces you read. It would help if you do another edit for a couple of typos and punctuation concerns. Bravo on a wonderfully written story. The subject matter is important and the happy ending provided by Mr Ginger R was a welcome reward at the end of the story. Keep writing. I will keep reading! tracker 
   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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