Hi Akan,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what the speaker is in danger from. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a child who fears something or someone is around and is waiting to harm him. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The speaker speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.