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 A Love Letter from the Boogeyman  [13+]
My name is Nox, and I live under your bed.
by teefies
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

Jeepers, what a story. The monster under someone’s bed comes to life and falls in love with the person he’s supposed to be… eating the nightmares of? An interesting symbiotic relationship could be seen, if not for the interruption of discovery. We are left hanging as to the ultimate resolution, due to the epistolary nature of the story, and I think that’s pretty cool. You’ve also kept the rating low, to my relief, as I found this on the Read a Newbie sidebar and didn’t think to check before I hopped into it.

The character development is charming and unexpected, as we see the weird situation playing out with vivid, lively descriptions and engaging moments of almost humorous tension. I’d love to have a sequel to see if they made peace with each other or if something else happened.

My first suggestion would be to familiarize yourself with the line of editing tiles above the text entry box; there you can adjust font size and style to create a more open and engaging reading experience. I like Size 4 Verdana best *Smile* A word count is also a great idea at the beginning of the story so we know what we’re getting into. Also, this is nifty enough that you may want to enter it into a couple of contests around here: "SENIOR CENTER FORUM"  and "Fox's Socks Newbie Short Story Contest"  as well as "Twisted Tales Contest" . The Senior Forum requires under 2000 words.

Aside from formatting, I can’t think of anything I’d improve on here.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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