Hi Cian,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Asher and Mia will find the gemstone. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man and his cat who go on a hunt for a gemstone. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)They were looking something.-Should read "They were looking for something."

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.