Hi Curtis,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Caleb will find peace in other ways. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who, in a world which over powers him mentally, finds peace and solace in a quiet hiking trail. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Caleb, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)listen and and find peace within a loud world.-Only one "and" is needed here.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.