Hi Deepak Sagar,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the speaker will find a way to stop being stuck thinking of things that are menial and start looking at what's really important. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who is so focused on the things he can't change that he can't see the important things going on in this life. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.