Hi Tim,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with anxiety and uneasiness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how letting others into a foreign country to live makes little sense, a lot of times. You have expressed you view point in a very enjoyable way. I loved this poem an read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.