Hi Ryyth,

This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with confusion as the reader wonders why Rin is giving Ryuck the locket. They will read on to find out. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are anxious to know about the details of Rin's past and how they will affect her relationship with Ryuck. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.