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 Ode to a Preschooler Open in new Window. [E]
If you have a four year old, you'll recognize this one...
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Hello Lobelia,

I found your portfolio while looking for trinkets. I browsed around and found "Ode to a Preschooler." I have a few thoughts after reading it I will share with you. I hope they will resonate.

I was engaged as I looked at this picture in your art folder. It linked me to this story of little Miss Miffed. From your wealth of adjectives, I felt like I knew her. The behavior at her party mirrors one by my daughter at her first party with school friends. They had a party game and my daughter was bent out of shape when she did not win. A hard part of growing up is pouting and trying to process a world that does not cooperate with your wishes.

The rhyme created a wonderful pace and rhythm. It begged to be read out loud. I loved it. All active words were chosen to paint this picture of how she acted and how it affected you. I read your portfolio description and saw the family photo. How wonderful to have raised your children and have the family expand with marriages and grandchildren. It is a wonderful life. I took to heart the final declaration that you "Can't resign."

After getting this far in the review, I read the poem again and caught the first line of each stanza and was glad I did. "Queen of Mean, Bear of Glare, Crone of drone, and Shrine of Whine are priceless.

It has been a long time since written, but is written as if her pity party happened last week. The activity has been removed and shows Invalid. If you choose, you could remove that link.

What delightful writing with so many things to choose from in your portfolio. You were lucky to have found WdC early on. I can see you are a gifted and prolific writer. I made a note to come back and visit again. I hope you keep on writing more things.

Write on!
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