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 Remembered Open in new Window. [E]
Isn't that all anyone wants?
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello fyn,

Some days we are meant to fall into a portfolio and find something that moves us. This just happened. I needed to read the words you put together to express what I have been feeling. "Remembered" is a well thought out and beautifully crafted free verse poem that resonates with me.

This line, "That the bits and pieces
of our lives are in someone's keeping?" says so much with few words.

The people you write about are indeed ones who many seem to forget, ignore, or just choose not to see. I want my children, grandchildren, and great grandchildren to remember our time together. I have written about my own life and shared individual stories with each of them. The homeless are concerning to me. Especially in the 110 degree plus weather here all summer. It honestly overwhelms me.

One suggestion that came to mind was the genre dark. It would encourage someone to read if that were exchanged for inspirational because that is what I deemed it to be.

Thank you for writing this. My compliments to you for a super well organized portfolio. It will be easy to find another piece to review. I will drop by again! Your poem inspired me to keep writing my memories which will be left for anyone who wants to read them.

Write on!
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