Hi teefies,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of love and longing. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Nox will reveal himself, and his feelings for Grace, to Grace. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, the Boogeyman, named Nox, has fallen in love with the girl whose bed he has lived under for most of her life and struggles to not scare her. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. You use strong imagery to put your reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.