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Given: Aug 10, 2024 at 11:12am
Length: 1,392 Characters |
1,157 w/o WritingML
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
The poem defines a trinity that's like us.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked that the poem invites the reader to think and to use critical thinking skills. The birds used all have something in common with us, evoking the dynamic of the inner pysche.
STRUCTURE
This is a cinquain poem. There are 22 syllables in the poem with 5 lines each structured 2, 4, 6, 8, 2 syllables a line.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read, but invites deeper thought.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Raven conjure rainbows," It seems there are two opposite here. Ravens are known as "dark birds" omens of darkness, and yet they conjure rainbows, known to bring hope. -- Maybe a darkness before the light/hope?
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening intrigues the reader and keeps them reading. The title sets the tone for the poem. Nice expression.
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