Hi Riley,

This is a fantastic piece. The tone is contemplative and tinged with confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what is happening to this villain in order to make them so thoughtful about life. They will read to the last word to find out. The piece is about a villain who is contemplating life and its inevitable unpleasant ending. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The piece concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.