Hi Isedora,

These are fantastic lyrics. The tone is full of anxiety and anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the lyrics, two women run away together when the husband of one finds out they are in love and attacks the women. I love lyrics which tell stories. I loved these lyrics and read to the last word. The free verse works well in these lyrics, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The lyrics flow extremely well. They are a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in these lyrics. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.