The Balloon [E] A young girl's imaginary friend |
Greetings, , I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest-CLOSED till May" . And you are one of three entrants, which means only 1st Place will be chosen. First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Followed the prompt & rules You followed the prompt nicely, but you were under the specified word count and you also modified after the deadline/before winners were announced. Another entrant did exactly the same thing, so you weren't alone. First Impression: I love this story. It's simple and beautiful. (And thank you for using the larger font! ) "What would happen," asked Phillip one day, "If you just let go of my string?" This is an important line in your story, sort of summing up what is happening. It's time for Tilly to let go of Phillip, but she's having a hard time of it. The conversation between the two of them, is what makes this story so special. Favorites: My heart tugged when Phillip (who is the balloon and also Tilly's imaginary friend) said, "I've always wanted to be an astronaut." I love this line! Final thoughts: Thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest! A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ") My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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