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 I love now as a man should love  [E]
A learned lesson, improvement of self, free verse
by sebs
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

This is a strong and elegant poem which reads like a hymn or an antique poem from the classic era of European literature. In fact at first I wondered if you had taken it from an old book or something and reposted it here, but I didn’t find anything with a brief search and I wouldn’t dream of making such an impolite suggestion. The elegance and timelessness of the language is appealing, and one doesn’t notice the lack of a tight rhyme because it feels as though we are reading song lyrics or a prayer.

When one reads poetry, especially when it’s written in the first person, one always wonders how personal the theme is to the author. Is the message truly from the heart, or is it a well crafted narrative in an old-fashioned style? Either way, the sincerity of thought expressed here is touching and inspiring as we see the man coming to a truer understanding of what love means. The sacrifice of love and the pain involved, as well as the reality of seeking to improve and understand one’s own self before attempting to deepen a relationship with anyone else, is heartfelt and deeply relatable.

If I may draw a connection with pop music here, part of your theme reminds me of the song Learn to Love Me, by Ryan Tedder and David Solomon. This mature and creative desire to self improve so as not to hurt anyone is something we need to see more of in the world. Your meter and flow are exceptional, and the repetition of words and phrases builds on itself in a lyrical way.

If I had to make any suggestions, I would say use Size 4 Verdana font... But I say that to almost everyone *Laugh* A line count would be a great idea, especially since I highly suggest you enter this into at least three separate contests: "Fox's Socks Newbie Poetry Contest"  "Shadows and Light Poetry Contest"  and "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest"  You have an excellent item here, and I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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