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 Across the street  [E]
Crossing the road to your dreams
by kaleb99
Review of Across the street  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi kaleb99,

This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with the speaker talking about their earliest memory. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They get very important information about the main character. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The chapter concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. Great job.

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