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 A Summer Of Lost Connections  [E]
Shy Myra and Nautica text, miscommunicate, and regret.
by Quesha
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

Ok, first off, I need to let you know that when I copied your story into the QuillBot AI Detector, it came back as “82% of text is likely AI generated.” Make of that what you will… I’m not here to accuse or judge. As a Newbie, perhaps an English language learner, I understand you may not feel entirely comfortable with your own skills in composition and may have asked the AI for assistance. But I would highly recommend you simply write from your heart as best you can and post it here for us, because then we can actually help you improve by offering advice which is relevant to your skill level. It is also somewhat disheartening to see that a story which I honestly enjoyed, and I looked forward to reviewing, is created by a bot.

I appreciate your desire to share your “true story” with us, and I found the concepts and themes to be deeply relevant and relatable. We all have a desire for open, honest interactions, and perhaps there’s an irony in the fact that you have not disclosed your use of AI with us in creating a story about vulnerability and communication.

Now, there’s always the chance that this is, possibly, the way you actually write. If so, I’ll give you a few brief tips on how not to write like a chat bot.

1. Avoid generalizing or moralizing vocabulary such as the entire final paragraph.

2. Instead, try to get down into the moment-by-moment scenes and feelings, spelling out everything in as much detail as possible. I know it sounds ridiculous, and it’s very difficult to explain what I mean because it’s an instinctive sort of thing. This enumeration of emotions is one of the best things that the AI has to catch up with us on, as yet.

3. Try writing it from the first person point of view, focusing on the experience through the eyes of only one main character instead of telling us about the thoughts and actions of everyone involved from a “50,000 foot” view. The third person omniscient narrator style is very likely to be seen as AI generated these days, and is also very old-fashioned and “un-trendy.”

I hope I’ve been of some help to you.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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