Eternity [E] For years and years I waited and searched. |
Greetings, Spiritual Dawning! I am reviewing this because I discovered it on the Read & Review page. And I'm so glad I did! First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked This is absolutely beautiful! Wow. I can see why you received the lovely 1st Place ribbon this deserves! The love of your life is one lucky woman. Your patience in waiting for the right person over the years has paid off, as this lovely piece proves. I love the italics throughout, as it adds to your journey as you Climbed mountains, searched forests while hearing her call your name the whole while. Even the font size works in this piece. I normally prefer a larger text, but for some reason, it's not needed here. It's perfect. I believe my favorite line is: I could hear her calling, seething at my disappearance. I can feel your yearning, hear her pulling you towards her. Wow. Beautiful. Your love and devotion are amazing. Suggestions/Comments to Consider I have no suggestions. Final Thoughts The mix of rhymes and non-rhyming words work wonderfully throughout this piece, giving it a lovely flow. I didn't even notice if it rhymed or not because I was so engrossed in your words. Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece. Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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