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 Happy birthday writing.com  [E]
my little birthday card style greeting to a nice home
by knight life
Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A heartwarming poem dedicated to WDC's 3rd birthday!

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

What a gem to find this little ditty dedicated to WDC's 3rd birthday when the 24th birthday is just around the corner.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. I might check the word "realy," in the 5th stanza - I think it might be "really." Also, check "your" in the 3rd stanza - I think it might be "you're."

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "So raise your glass, And lets say cheers, For all you've done" It's a nice, easy description that one can visualize. It evokes a sense of happiness and cheer - good vibes. It captures the essence of a celebration.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader nicely and pulls them in. The title fits the poem. Nice, easy expression.

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