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 Forevermore and Nevermore Open in new Window. [E]
Children's story
by Macklin Freemark Author Icon
Review by Lornda Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Flipflops8* Welcome to Writing.Com! I found your story under the 'Review & Read' option. *Stary*

*Flipflops8* I enjoyed reading your children's story! I thought it was written well and told a beautiful story. It was easy to visualize the scene and to picture the beauty surrounding the two places of Forevermore and Nevermore. *Thumbsupgreen*

*Flipflops8* Overall, a story that could be transformed into a book with colorful illustrations. The only suggestion I have would be to introduce the character at the beginning and perhaps she could show us what she saw when she visited these places. I thought what Elara learned on her journey was an emotional one and this thread shone through really well. Nice work, and keep up the great work!

Enjoy your summer! *Beach*

~Lornda

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